Faceless Options

[CROSSFIRE]

John Averymen is a depressed misanthropic who grows tired of the world and its inhabitants...

Shortly after I finished "Havoc" (link to site | link to read) I began writing a new story; it's still not finished and I haven't been able to work on it for the last several weeks, so I uploaded what I have to Authonomy.com in hopes of getting some feedback on it, but, the unfortunate case with Authonomy is most people don't seem very interested in reading others' material unless you promise to "swap reads", (meaning: read their book in exchange for them reading your's) and I just don't have the time or will to read someone else's work to "earn" a review for my own.

Anyhow, I thought maybe some of you might be interested in reading at least some of what I have written and give me your thoughts on the style/direction of the writing and story.

Link to read the book on Authonomy: http://authonomy.com/ViewBook.aspx?bookid=15160

Story synopsis:

An attempt at writing a graphic novel/novel hybrid, Faceless is a story about a reclusive, misanthropic man, John Averymen, who wakes up one morning and decides he "can't go to work today". Fed up with society and its degenerates - which includes criminals and law-abiding citizens alike - he goes on a spiraling path towards insanity. A fascination with the media's latest hot-topic criminal "The Nurse" John begins trying his hand at super-villainy, leading him to discover new depths of his hatred for the world.


Faceless is a dark and twisted tail of a man's spiral into the criminal mindset. Taking a first-person approach, the reader is subjected to the unsettling rationalization of a broken psyche; even more disturbing, one might find himself relating to John's rationale, or even agreeing with it, allowing the reader to feel the internal conflict of how right and wrong are distorted by our own experiences and philosophies.

[Aglor]

I'm on chapter six now, I think, and I'll read the rest tomorrow. Overall I'm enjoying it, and there are a few typos but nothing too major (though I would recommend going over it and fixing them). Also, there is an entire paragraph where it looks almost like you had caps lock on when you thought it was off, because every letter except the first of the sentence in capitalized.

Still, I'm enjoying the story quite a bit.

[CROSSFIRE]

Thanks for the feedback, Aglor.

The caps-lock issue is probably due to the font I used - at least, I think so because I can't find what you're referring to - because I used a font that types in all uppercase regardless, but it's not a default Windows font, so it most likely replaced it for another font on your computer and that's why you're seeing it that way.

I'd be happy to hear more detailed feedback from you once you've read the rest of it. Once again, though, thanks.